1. Since I grew up with two brothers, I can picture the main character as being full of tough love. As far as physical appearances are concerned, I really have no clue what he looks like. Physical attributes may have been good for the cousin, since he was going to try bull riding. If he was scrawny, that would have added to the effect of the story.
2. I would not take any characters out, but I would like to see a compassionate female in the story. Maybe there could be a sister of the cousin or brother to be worried for the cousin. When the cousin got hurt, she would add a bit more drama to the story, because she would be very emotional. Her worries would be coming true.
3. Having to deal with tough love my whole life, the plot interested me. I would have loved to have read a bit more on the cousin's bull riding camp "fun".
4. I could picture where most of the scenes took place, but only during the last half of the story. Even then, the pictures of the places I thought of were lacking detail. Therefore, a bit more detail could be told about places such as the bull riding camp and the store.
5. The dialogue seems real enough, but more dialogue could be used in the store/workplace scene to add an urgency feeling.
6. A good start is to have people read it and ask them questions such as the one asked here. Then use the input to mold the story for the better, without completely changing it. Then have people read it again and give more input.
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